Alright maybe just a little fix? As in a bonus scene? Okay here's what happened. I was checking out my reviews the other day for Abel on Amazon and saw I have 81. Thank you SO much to those of you who've taken the time to review!! *hugs!!* I smiled and thought just 19 more to get to 100. Sadly it's been stuck there for days. I sighed thinking so close. Then I broke into song "So close and yet so faaaaaaaar!!!" After the rude comments from my husband in the other room about me scarin' the dog and him banging on the wall, >=( I went back to work. I had my Sweet Sofie doc open double checking that I had my facts straight about Brandon for his story. As usual I got all caught up in the story and started reading other parts that didn't even involve him. I came across this scene.
Angel and Sarah being elected prom queen and
king should’ve been a good thing. Except an ex-flame of Angel’s, Dana, had had
a few too many, and she and the rest of her cheerleader girlfriends decided to
protest and demand a recount. It started to get ugly when all of Sarah and
Sofia’s friends from the track team came to Sarah’s defense.
Dana and a few of her friends were actually
escorted out during Sarah and Angel’s dance. Sofia was livid. More than once,
Eric had to hold her back. The Moreno in her was alive and well and ready to
kick some ass.
After reading I thought I should write that prom scene. Then I had Déjà vu moment! This wasn't the first time I thought this. Then it hit me. Wait a minute! I DID write that scene... I'm pretty sure I did.. didn't I? So the search was on! I started digging in my files and memory sticks where I have tons of stuff I've started writing and set aside and then I heard the harp music and the heavenly lights lit up my cave! There it was. I knew it!! I did write it. So I start reading and get all into this piece I hadn't read in so long. *sigh* Now what to do with it? *scratching head* It's too short to publish. It's only about a chapters length and it doesn't really tell a story. It's just their prom scene.
As the norm with my attention span of a gnat I clicked on Facebook and forgot ALL about it. I later checked my Abel reviews again. Still at 81 then I heard the harp music again!!! I KNOW! Offer up the bonus scene when we reach 100 reviews! This would give me time to tweak the scene some more and beg my editor to take time off her busy schedule to give it a whirl. So y'all ready to do this? How bout a teaser first? My arm's twisting... my arm is twisting. I think I heard something pop! Oh alright!
*Spoiler alert!!! For those who haven't read Forever Mine this contains spoilers!!*
Here's the beginning of the bonus Angel Sarah prom short.
UPDATED 10/7/13!! You guys did it! We hit 100 reviews of Abel on Amazon so as promised here is the full bonus scene and Angel Sarah fix! Enjoy! *unedited
UPDATED 10/7/13!! You guys did it! We hit 100 reviews of Abel on Amazon so as promised here is the full bonus scene and Angel Sarah fix! Enjoy! *unedited
“Sarah!” Her
cousin Valerie rushed toward her as Sarah turned the knob on her locker. “Did
you hear?”
“Hear what?” Sarah
didn’t even look away from the combination lock she hastened to open. She was already
running late.
“You and Angel
were nominated for prom king and queen.”
Now Sarah turned
to Valerie feeling her insides hollow. She already hated that for the past
several months she’d had a huge limelight focused right on her because of the
ongoing trial of her track coach who attempted to force himself on her, now
this?
“What?” She’d
hoped this weekend’s prom would be a magical and welcome distraction from the
tension she’d felt for months. This changed everything. “Who nominated me?”
“The teachers,”
Valerie smiled. “They just posted the nominated court. I knew you two would be on
it!”
Sarah’s first
thoughts? Was there any way out of this? But asking Valerie seemed at that
moment like a bad idea. Her cousin was just too excited about this. She’d be
the first to try to talk her out of passing up the nomination; if that was even
possible. As if this weren’t bad enough her cousin laid another one on her.
“Dana was
nominated, too,” she made a gagging face.
Great. What a freaking disaster. The entire school
already made them out to be arch enemies. They were going to love this.
Angel being
nominated was no surprise. His oldest brother had won both the homecoming and
prom king titles and Alex took homecoming king last year. Valerie told her the
only reason Alex didn’t make prom king was because at the time of nominations
he was on probation for a fight. More like a slaughter, Valerie had laughed.
The poor guy who'd made the mistake of disrespecting their sister Sofia never
had a chance.
Sarah slammed her
locker shut and began walking. “Don’t worry about it. You and Angel got this.”
Two of the girls
from her track team rushed up to her and hugged her squealing. “Oh my God! I’m
so excited. We’re so voting for you
and Angel.”
Sarah smiled
nodding in appreciation and thanked them. As soon as that little delay was over
she was nearly tackled by Angel's sister Sofia who came out of nowhere. “I knew
it! I knew it!” she not only hugged Sarah she kissed her cheek loudly. “This
weekend is gonna to be awesome!”
Sofia had been
more than excited about prom for weeks now. Even though she was a junior she’d
be going to prom with one of Angel’s best friends, Eric. They’d all gone
shopping together for prom and Sarah really should be excited. She finally had
not one but two girls she was very close to in her life and they were all going
to prom together with their dream guys.
Conjuring up a
smile she forced herself to snap out of it and squeezed Sofie back. “Yes, it is
gonna be awesome.”
When Sarah pulled
away she hugged Valerie, too. Forget Dana. Sarah wasn’t going to let that caddy
little bitch and all her minions ruin this for her.
~*~
Angel squeezed
Sarah’s hand. Every time he thought she couldn’t possibly get any more
beautiful than she already was she proved him wrong. When he and Alex picked
her and Valerie up he was almost speechless. This entire night they’d been
surrounded by all the other girls attending prom completely done up but they
may as well have been invisible. As usual Angel couldn’t keep his eyes or lips
off Sarah. She was perfection in her body hugging black satin gown.
“Relax,” he
whispered in her ear then kissed her cheek.
All week he’d
gotten a bad vibe from her and she'd finally fessed up that being nominated for
the prom court made her completely uncomfortable. She'd been afraid he might be
upset with her for not embracing it as the honor it should be. Of course he’d
laughed telling her that’s what he loved about her most. Unlike Dana who’d been
hamming it up all week campaigning hard for votes Sarah was so reserved she’d
barely even talked about it. The only times she had was when she was forced to
by people that congratulated her and assured her she they’d be voting for her.
He thought about
seeing Dana and her friends sneaking alcohol into their drinks earlier and
wondered if maybe he should’ve thought of sneaking in a little wine for Sarah.
It might’ve calmed her a little because if he had to guess she was probably
wishing with all her might right about now that her name was not one of the
ones about to be announced.
“Ladies and
gentlemen it is my honor to present to you this year’s prom king and queen,”
the principal paused as the drum roll started.
Angel could feel
how tense Sarah’s body had gone and he leaned in her ear again as the damn
principal took her sweet time looking around with the stupidest smile. “Breathe,”
he whispered.
She smiled but did
inhale deeply then let it out squeezing his hand.
“Angel Moreno and
Sarah Fiero. Congratulations!”
Sofia was the
first one to hoot jumping up and down then there was more applause, cheering
and everyone talking at once as phone cameras flashed away. Angel hugged Sarah
who seemed to relax finally but still didn’t look thrilled to be in the
spotlight. As the principal and her assistants slipped the sashes over Angel
and Sarah’s head another kind of chanting began soft at first but the droning
sound got louder and louder.
“Recount!
Recount!”
The principal
rushed back to the mic. “This will not
be tolerated!”
“Not the king,”
one of the girls in the crowd where most of the chanting was coming from yelled
out. “We know Angel won. But we demand a recount of the queen!”
“Bullshit!” No
surprise Sofie was the first one to retort followed by Valerie and all of
Sarah’s other track team members and friends.
Angel slipped his
arms around Sarah’s waist from behind and kissed her temple trying to remain
calm for her sake. “Do not sweat this
Sarah,” he said into her ear. “Sofie’s right. It’s pure jealous bullshit.”
Sarah said nothing
just continued staring straight ahead as the chants went back and forth. Angel
kissed her bare neck softly. She wore her hair up in a fancy up do. Small
delicates ringlets of hair fell strategically around her soft skin. Everything
about her was perfect tonight. But she was completely tense again and he hated
it.
Dana was behind
all this no doubt. He wouldn’t even give her the pleasure of looking her way.
He glanced down at Sofie to make sure Eric could handle her. She was one of the
loudest shouting in Sarah’s defense. Security began calming everyone down and
after apologizing to Sarah they were given a chance to thank the teachers and
peers that voted for them but it was such an awkward few minutes Angel felt for
her.
After giving a
quick thank you speech Angel turned to Sarah and finished his speech holding
his hand out to her. “Now I’d like nothing more than to dance with my
girlfriend and not only the queen of my life but very beautiful, very deserving
prom queen, Sarah.”
With much applause
and almost obnoxiously loud cheers from the crowd obviously on Sarah’s side
they walked out onto the dimmed dance floor. He could feel Sarah finally
relaxing as they danced in the spotlight to the romantic song playing. Just as
things had calmed there was a commotion in the crowd again.
“I don’t want Angel
to think I had anything to do with it.” He heard Dana cry as one of her friends
tried holding her back. “He already hates me. Why did you guys do that?”
He squeezed his
eyes shut as he felt Sarah go stiff again. “She’s been drinking, babe. Ignore
it. This is your moment.”
“We can leave
after this right?” she whispered back.
“Whatever you
want,” he said trying not to let on how pissed he was that Dana had ruined what
should’ve been one of the best memories of Sarah’s high school years. It’d be
memorable alright but for the wrong fucking reason now.
About to kiss her
neck when Dana’s cries distracted him again, he glanced up the irritation
nearly uncontainable. The moment his eyes met with Dana’s her face crumbled. “I
swear I had nothing to do with all that.”
She wasn’t allowed
to say much more before security escorted her and several of her friends out.
Sarah pulled away from him just then. “Let’s just go.”
“No, Sarah,” he leaned
down to look at her face. Fuck! She
too looked like she might start crying. “Baby, let’s just finish the song.
She’s gone now.”
Taking a deep
breath she leaned her face against his chest but there was no denying she was
upset. Her apprehension all week about tonight had proved to be right on the
mark. Maybe Dana hadn’t put her friends up to this but it was because of her that the protest had started. It was
all her cheerleader friends and girls from the flag and dance team that she was
so tight with. None of them had ever liked Sarah. Least of all when the
question of Sarah’s faithfulness had come into play earlier that year. That was all Dana’s doing. The rumors
that Sarah had cheated on Angel and that’s why they’d split briefly had spread
quickly just after Angel confirmed to Dana they were broken up.
Ever since, they’d
done everything to make Sarah out to be a cheating girlfriend that got caught.
That is until everything was straightened out and the real truth came out. It
was nothing like that but by then the damage had been done and he knew people
still questioned whether she actually did and Angel had been a sap to take her
back. He didn’t give a shit what anyone thought. He knew the truth and that’s all that mattered.
With the
formalities finally over, they were able to get their things together and start
heading out. “So you got Sof, right?” Alex asked as they all headed out the
lobby of the banquet hall.
Angel nodded. He
had a feeling Alex and Valerie wouldn’t be joining them at the high school
after parties. His brother was in college now. Between that and football he
didn’t get to see Valerie often. Even though they weren’t formally a couple
Alex acted every bit as if they were when they were together. Times like tonight when he actually got an entire
night with Valerie were happening less frequently now that football practices
were getting longer. Angel was sure his brother was going to make up for every
minute he hadn’t been able to see her in the last week.
Valerie
congratulated them again and then they were gone. Sofie held them up a few
minutes because she wanted to take a few more pictures with Sarah before she
took her crown and sash off. They walked out of the banquet hall the girls a
few steps behind them comparing pictures on their phones.
“Angel,” Dana’s
tear streaked face pleaded. “Can I talk to you for just a second?”
“I can’t,” was his
immediate response but she looked so damn broken up he couldn't help feeling
bad for her.
“I just need a
moment,” she begged.
Angel turned back
to Sarah who stood next to Sofie. They both looked at him waiting for his
response and though Sarah’s expression wasn’t as severe as Sofie’s she didn’t
look happy. He lifted his hand for them to give them a second and Sarah
immediately walked away. Sofie went after her but not before giving him that
look he only ever saw on her when she was furious. Shit. Eric went after them giving Angel a sympathetic look.
“Make it fast,
Dana, you’ve caused enough trouble tonight.”
“But that's just
it. I didn’t! That’s what I wanted to
make sure you knew. I never asked any of them to do that. I’m so pissed at them
right now. Do you know how bad that made me look? It was bad enough not to win
but to make me look like a bitter ass loser?” She wiped her nose with the back
of her hand and swatted at her continued tears. “I don’t even care so much
about that as I do that you think I planned that.”
“Alright,” he said
starting to walk away. “I believe you. okay? I’m not mad at you and I don’t
blame you. We’re good but I gotta go.”
She reached out
and caught his arm. “I know you’re with her now and all but I do want you to
know I’ve always cared about you genuinely.”
He nodded taking
his arm back,certain the alcohol had something to do with the ongoing tears.
“Got it,” he said taking another step away from her.
“I’m serious,
Angel. You’ll always hold a special place in my heart and as much as I wish it
was me in your life not Sarah I’d never set out to hurt you or her because I
know how much she means to you. I really hope you believe that.”
“I do.”
Not really but at
the moment he’d say anything to just get the hell away from her and get back to
Sarah. He started to walk away again.
“I love you,
Angel.” He slowed only for a moment to glance back at her. “I always have.”
Yep, she was drunk. He didn’t even respond to
that and kept walking.
~*~
“Do you mind taking
me home, Eric?” They were the first words Sarah had attempted to say since
walking away from Angel and Dana. Sofie had been doing most of the talking
assuring Sarah that Angel was just being his typical self—Dana’s tears were the
only reason he’d given her the time of day.
Sarah had never
discussed this with Sofie but she had good reason to harbor insecurities about
Angel’s feelings about Dana. She just wouldn't get into all that now. All she
wanted was for this night to be over now.
“Sarah!” Angel
called out as rushed to them.
Not wanting to
even look at him she turned to Eric but he shrugged. “I would Sarah but you
really think he’s gonna let you leave with us like this?”
“Leave where?”
Angel asked as he reached them.
With the emotion
still at her throat Sarah was afraid she too might cry like stupid Dana, so she
swallowed hard and glanced away. “Babe, I’m sorry I just…” he took her hand in
his. “Look at me,” he turned her face gently to him frowning when he saw her flooding
eyes he kissed her softly then turned to Eric. “We’ll meet you in a little bit
alright? I’ll call you to see where you’re at?”
Eric and Sofie
walked away leaving them alone. “Just take me home.” Sarah tried pulling her
hand out of his.
“No,” he insisted
pulling her to him. “I’m sorry, Sarah.
She just wanted me—us to know
she didn’t plan what happened inside.”
The anger Sarah
had felt building earlier boiled over and she glared at him this time pulling
her hand free. “Funny she didn’t ask to speak to me did she? It was just you
she wanted some time alone with. And of course you thought she deserved a
chance to explain herself because it’s not like all the crap she’s pulled since
me and you got back together takes anything from her credibility.” She shook
her head trying desperately not to read too much into the fact that Angel had
not only given in so easily to Dana’s request to speak to him after what she’d
just pulled but he was actually buying the bullshit that she had nothing to
with it. “Just take me home, Angel or I’ll call my mom to pick me up. You can
go do all the damn after parties by yourself. Maybe you’ll run into Dana again
and she can feed you some more lies you’ll gladly believe like you always do.”
“No babe, wait,”
he stepped in front of her as she tried to walk past him toward his car and
peered at her questioningly. “What do you mean always do?”
She swallowed hard
again refusing to cry. “I’ve seen pictures okay?”
His eyes opened
wide now as his eyebrow lifted. “Of what?”
“Of you and her.”
The very thought burned her up and the day she’d come across them she’d stared
obsessively at the photos of Angel holding Dana, kissing her neck and nibbling
on her ear feeling nauseated the entire time.”
Your friend Ty’s girlfriend and I are facebook friends. I was looking
through some of her old pictures and you and Dana were in a lot of them. You
two were more than friends once upon
a time.”
“No we weren’t,”
Angel took her hand in his again. “I’ve never lied to you about her. Yes we did
hang out but she was never my girlfriend. Besides what does it matter now anyhow?
That was a long time ago.”
“What does it
matter?” She glared at him knowing she wouldn’t be crying anymore because now
she was pissed. “How about because I will forever know that this girl who’s
done nothing but attempt to do and say things to cause problems between us
since day one, the same girl whose been doing everything she can to keep up the
rumors that I cheated on you is the very girl you ran to just two days after we
broke up.”
“I didn’t run to
her,” Angel squeezed both her hands now. “We’ve been through this. I was
desperate for answers. I was actually hoping she’d tell me something that day anything that would shed light on things
and hopefully make me change my mind about the break up.”
“You could’ve
called me and I would’ve explained but instead you chose to go to her for answers. Maybe you did because you knew
there was no way she of all people would be shedding any positive light on the
situation.”
He slipped his arm
around her waist and as angry and hurt as she was she actually welcomed it. She
needed to feel his warmth. Feel the sincerity in his touch. It wasn’t that she
didn’t believe him she just hated the doubt she felt especially after seeing
all the nauseating pictures that confirmed that what he had with Dana was much
more than he'd ever admitted and maybe just maybe he still felt something for
her.
Angel lifted her
chin. “Sarah, do you have any idea how relieved I was to find out the real
truth? Any idea how glad I am every time I think back to those days and
remember how fucking miserable I was without you that we worked it out?” He
kissed her softly and suddenly she was feeling emotional again. “I’m sorry that
I gave into her tonight. I just saw
her crying and figured it wouldn’t kill me to hear her out for a minute and
while I knew you wouldn’t be thrilled if I had known you’d be this upset about it I wouldn’t have. But
I need you to know you have nothing
to worry about when it comes to Dana or anybody.”
She bit her bottom lip staring at his after he
kissed her again wanting nothing more than to believe that with all her heart.
“Do you have to be so sweet to her?”
He smiled the mood
finally lightening up. “I’m not sweet to her. I just tolerate her. But there’s
only so much I’ll tolerate. I promise.”
“And you really
believe she had nothing to do with what happened tonight?”
He shrugged. “I
believe she was sorry about the outcome. Whether she planned it or not that
shit backfired on her hard. Even she knows what a bitter dumbass it made her
look like.”
Sarah sighed
leaning against his chest. “One more month until graduation and hopefully we’ll
never have to deal with her again.”
Angel rubbed her
back. “I know things like tonight are hard to ignore. But you should do like I
do with all the other shit her and her friends do at school. Ignore it. I don’t
feel like I’m dealing with her at all. Her existence to me has zero
significance unless of course it upsets you and then I draw the line but like I
said babe, I swear you have nothing
to worry about.”
Even if it was a
tough one to swallow—those photos of him and Dana were now burned in her brain.
“I’m just glad tonight won’t be ending like I was envisioning it would.”
“How’s that? He
pulled away to look at her his expression more than concerned.
She shook her
head. “I wasn’t thinking we’d be breaking up over this or anything but I did
think I might be slamming your car door shut when you dropped me off and I'd be
spending a sleepless night tossing and turning over this.”
Looking a little
less concerned but still obviously bothered he frowned. “C’mon, Sarah, you know
me. In what world do you think I would’ve let that happen?”
Make that 18!
ReplyDeleteThat was amazing! I love these books:)
DeleteOmg! I freakin love it!
ReplyDeleteGreat, just great. Now I HAVE to re-read the whole Moreno series. Probably Fate and 5th Street too. *sigh* Damn you Elizabeth. Lol. ;)
ReplyDeleteNow, why in the world would you have ever cut that scene?!? No more cutting out parts to please your editor/publisher. Your fans want ALL the details. Why would you mess with perfection?
ReplyDeleteWhat Marcy Meyer and Shelley Chastagner said.. Gotta re-read the moreno series again and fate again now!!! Loved this scene!!.. And when is Breaking Brandon coming out i can not wait!!
ReplyDeleteThanks guys!! <3 And actually this was not cut. I wrote it later. I think I was working on Sweet Sofie and when I wrote the scene where Eric mentions the incident I decided Oooh I should write out that scene in Angel and Sarah's POV's! LOL I do that a lot. I have some more scenes you "heard" about in Sweet Sofie but never actually saw. Those will be in Breaking Brandon and I can hardly wait to hear what you guys think! Thanks so much for reading!!
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shared on fb and twitter!!!!!!
Love these 2. Angel is a sweetheart & Sarah just light up his world. My favorite couple!!!
ReplyDeletePlease more Sarah and Angel. They'll always be my favorites!!!
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